My poem topic is overeating. I start with explaining how good food makes me very happy. Then, I tell a humorous fiction story about overeating and becoming highly overweight. The B-role that was included is me acting out the story of the little boy that overeats. I think that several audiences would enjoy the visuals because there are some funny actions that I act out.
Although I did not use many special effects, the effect I applied make it more intriguing to the person watching. It makes the watcher want to possibly watch it more than once, and makes it better overall in many ways. I am satisfied with my final results but I do feel that I could have improved it a lot too. I could have done this by adding more effects like music, special fades and other things like that. I am very glad we did this project and would love to do more activities similar to this one.
Although I did not use many special effects, the effect I applied make it more intriguing to the person watching. It makes the watcher want to possibly watch it more than once, and makes it better overall in many ways. I am satisfied with my final results but I do feel that I could have improved it a lot too. I could have done this by adding more effects like music, special fades and other things like that. I am very glad we did this project and would love to do more activities similar to this one.
BEST POEM OF ALL.
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"My happiness extends for miles" awesome effects there, it made it even more applicable. One thing that could be improved is the text layovers, they were kind of late. Nice rhyme scheme and great humor!
ReplyDeleteThat was an amazing poem. Yum.
ReplyDeleteI think you needed some more B-Roll to fill in those blank spots.
Nice, clear, audio. Good job!!
I like how your video was really funny and made us all laugh!!
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time try to find more footage so you wont have that blob background thingy.
Really great job though!!
Haha great! I really love your humor in this visual poem and the acting, the script and your colors!
ReplyDeleteMaybe fix audio in the beginning
Great I really love this Visual Poem Noa, this is the fav!
Your voiceover was clear and understandable. I think that you could have added music or more effects. It was a funny poem which I liked.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you added a story into your poem. Some of the text layovers go off the screen. The visuals you used matched your poem and kept my attention.
ReplyDeleteNice job Noa! The B-Roll was excellent in the emotions!
ReplyDeleteThere could be music in this, it'll create much interest. But still, the story was literately keeping me in, as well as the B-Roll.
The Poem was read quite clearly!
Great Job Noa! (Don't know which Diner, but nice to know.)
I liked the humor that you had in your story. Some of your shots were blurry. Your visuals matched your poem and caught my attention.
ReplyDeleteGreat acting. Some of your text layover got cut off. Great overall story and I really like the stop motion in the beginning.
ReplyDeleteThat was great, really funny. There was a green screen at the end of the shot with the hat. The B-roll fit the voiceover perfectly.
ReplyDeleteI LOVED your poem. Best one yet. However I noticed a green flash at one point, you could fix that by replacing the footage around it. I loved the humor and the b-roll that related to what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteHello, Noa. Nice poem. I really liked how you used humor in your poem, it was funny. One thing I suggest, you should make sure that your test doesn't get cut off. Overall, I really liked your visual poem.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was so funny I smiled the whole way through
ReplyDeleteA little more B-Roll would be great. I would love to see that diner XD
The humor of this poem gets another compliment. So far, one of the best poems I've seen
I really liked how your b-roll related to what you were saying in your poem.
ReplyDeleteYour voiceover sounded like you were blowing into the mic.
I loved your visual poem overall! It was pretty funny.
THAT WAS GREAT. I LOVED IT.
ReplyDeletegreen flash and at one point and the text didn't fit on the screen
That was definately my favorite one, your voice over was clear and the poem was AWESOME.
1.) I really loved your poem; it was a super funny topic!
ReplyDelete2.) There's not much that I can critique but I did notice a flash of green.
3.) Great job! You read with great expression and your b-roll matched well with what you were saying.
I love that you put a lot of humor into it.
ReplyDeleteMusic or some sort of background sound could have been add.
The b-roll was good and related to the poem.
GREAT JOB! Love your acting skills! I also love your story!
ReplyDeleteI think if could have time to put a soft music in the background.
But even without it, it was GREAT! GOOD JOB!
Hiya Noa. This is totally not April. Great work on your visual poem. As requested, I will try to use big words.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you addressed over-eating it it's a very serious problem in the U.S. and made it comedic. It really made me laugh and those rhymes were just fabulous.
One thing I suggest is to put expression in your voice. I get how it was supposed to be comedic but the monotone in your voice just lessened down that "funniness" you had in your poem. Either way, your ending in your poem made up for it.
Great acting skills by the way. I really liked who you reenacted your entire poem. I felt it was like gave it more of your own style.
Great work dude and good luck with the movie trailer Noa!
I liked the humor in your poem. The end went a little fast. Your b-roll matched really well.
ReplyDeleteyour poem was super funny and well written, you could of added some backround music, overall great job!
ReplyDeleteI liked all of your b-roll because it was funny and interesting. I think that you could've got even more b-roll because there were some empty spaces. I also liked how you read your poem with emotion and expression.
ReplyDeleteThat was so awesome! your story was absolutely hilarious! Maybe have a relatable background? I don't know theres not much to change I love everything about your story... Awesome job best one yet!
ReplyDelete- I liked your b-roll because you weren't afraid to do something silly on camera.
ReplyDelete- Maybe you could've added some music?
- Voiceover had emotion! :)